Alot of power, packed into a "to the point" poem... my only suggestion is mabey think of changing the last line to something that flows alittle better.... Awesome poem

yeh thanks for that, im still thining but wanted to post it anyway...i really apreciate your votes and comments, champion :)

I retract my previous suggestion on the last line, my dumb ass skipped a line.... sorry bout that

hehe dats ok, im not extactic with the ending as it is.....