nice, dont always feel the need to go in an order, be free with the way that you write and express yourslef...do it for you, this poem feels made for others...it rhymes well and sounds nice...lee nicole

Good work

first of all i'd like to say that the title was perfect- couldn't have picked a better one. the poem was short but very well written- just the way i like it. bittersweet. i think many people can relate to this. keep it up. take care :)