great job. hope ur okay. really good poem
~cort~

This conveys a lot of sadness (I use the word "convey" a lot...). Do you write your poetry from things that actually happen? Just wondering... Take care.

~Ciao Lipton

Lipton-
Most of my poetry is about real life situations, and emotions ... although, some are triggered from what I read and such.

lovely, I love your imagery and your words. Each line was beautiful, and I especially admired this stance,

"I take a sharpened edge
And stab until I feel
The midst of pain inside me
To hide what cannot conceal"

I can completly relate to that and its absolutly lovely. Great job

wo dude!~

WOW this was magnificant!!! I can't even pick a favorite stanza, they were all so wonderful and powerful and amazing...You kept a perfect flow and tone. Your work is truly amazing! Words can't even describe! great job!

"I take a sharpened edge
And threaten watering veins
To spill all that is left of me
To flow in deadly rains"

....<3 wow. i loved it. truly amazing.

Excellent poem, very well written. Take care...

super poem it sounds like me chack my poems out jessxx