I really like the issue you are writing about, and i must bear in mind your age, without trying to be arrogant.

I think this poem needs a little reworking. It seems far too literal and blunt, like you could have suggested certain facts so that that the reader can discover their meaning without being overly metaphoric to the point of ridiculousness.

But yeah, keep at it.

So your basicly saying its a load of cr*p? If thats what you meant why didn't you just come out and say it? I can take Criticism, but not when people are down right rude!

Oh yeah and you were arrogant

No, Hippie, that's not what Kevin was saying...beliee me if he thought it was "a load of cr*p" he'd either say that... or say nothing.

Thats a 5 I liked it and i can relate at any age. I have had issues myself. Keep on writing I enjoy reading ur poems. If u can check out mine!

Thats good keep at it maybe you could even give me some suggestions on my poems?