hey this awesome, u describe it so well
i tried re-reading my poem and noticed it may seem confusing to others so i made a few changes...thanks bunches for the comments and keep writing!
courtney

Hey this poem is awesome, you are really talented, I can picture the things you talk about in the poem! Keep writing!

Awesome poem, It was creative and flowed nicely, take care and keep writing

Thanx for the comments everyone esp Killer of Time, I agree with you i think this is probably my best poem and I know that some of my other poems are really bad but meh, that's life.

I loved this poem. I especially liked the setting and the flow. It painted a great scene when read which is always a plus. Keep it up
Aaron

oh wow... you write so well i really really like your style! keep it up!

Nice poem =)