Good poem....beautiful wordings...take care and keep writing....FIVE>>>

Very great poem. I loved it. =)

Initially agreeing with Suicide on this one, and then I read the poem over again and realised 47 readings later (cue: slight exaggeration) what you were getting at. (Maybe).

I especially liked:

For you, my love,
are now, undone.

Well done, and try not to fret when you feel your other poems arent working out.

-paperdoll

Yeah the poem was good and i'm pretty damn sure that the meaning I took from it was completely different from the way you meant it, but i think that is a sign of good poetry, it really got me thinking hard. Thanx for the good read.
*Incognito*

Amazing...not far from how a Bard would sing from how vivid you impress.
A lovely poise that literally makes my heart swell. (5)

Your poems are so beautiful. I was reading some of the other comments and they all said I don't think I completely understood....like someone said that IS a sign of good poetry. Everyone looks at things differently...>Great job....

very good work my friend. it read extremely well and i enjoyed what seemed like a trip from the usual style. the stanzas were layed out well and it was definetely 5/5 material. bytheway, i never resubmit things because i dont like a vote. people will think what they think about my work and they deserve their opinion. peace man!