man this is a really good poem.

Thanks Lisa :-p

WOW...I loved it. You did a AWSOME job writing it. It flowed perfect.
Great job 5/5
take care
Scooby

Ooh, I like this! It's short but says so much, you truly have a way with words.
I love these lines:

"I’d shed my precious life to build your crown,
Give me air and then, let me drown."

Well done! Take care and keep it up~Holly