hey, I have read this before, i just don't like to comment, cos I feel like I'm saying the same as everyone else. good stuff, awesome work.

emma x

Well, I like your use of vivid language, and the entire poem overall, but I think the rhythm sometimes falters a bit, and the rhyme scheme is a bit predictable..

I also feel that this poem is the result of cramped emotions that you've spilled onto paper... aka teenage angst. Not always a bad thing, of course.. and honestly, I do like it..

but check this site out...

http://www.eliteskills.com/poetry/Teen_Angst_Poetry/

also, I'd proofread it a bit.. you have some typos..

but nice job anyway, and I hope the site helps :)

I love your poem, your writing is beautiful. I know that spilling all your feelings into paper, in this case the computer helps a lot. This shows that from sadness something beautiful always grows. Keep on the good work...