Thanx.. its nice that people like it :)

hi there! This is a great poem you wrote here. Remarkable talent..the best I've read so far. are you really 14?

that poem was totally awesome!!! i loved it!! and i like it cuz it's true and we should think of that...good job!
~Sonja~

Nothing will go prefect if we continue to lie to ourselves…as we will
-fine writing though

it's so deep. It takes a deeper understanding to get the words. Its as if you can see inside up in this poem.

Thank you again, its nice to know others like my stuff and in their own way understand the words and what lays behind them. When I wrote this poem I truly thought that it would become one that was thrown to the side and not considered in everyday life.. And yes I am 14 and I suppose for this reason I didn’t think anyone would listen to my words or thoughts, the information I have so far gather through life and used in my own way. I truly held a grudge against the world for not listening, you may not see it fully from my point and may not understand the exact meaning behind it, but every comment and thought towards this poem is acceptable and correct to that individual, as I have said.. people collect information and use it in their own way, that makes you what you are… lol look at me going on.. sorry …. Well its nice that people do like what I have written.. Thank you again :D its nice to get others views.. :)

Let the truth be told

I rated this very high. Its very very good, and I love it! I love the vocabulary used, also. The only critique I can make is that it almost seems as two different poems, two different thoughts. Maybe try useing the first half as one poem...But it is very well written, nice work!

Thank you all who have commented, and yes let the truth be told :D
Christy its nice to get a critique in which I can revolve and improvement around, though in this particular poem it is hard to draw it into one persons view. As there are so many different views in the world, I often like to see from different view as you can gain from them.
The two views I used in this was 2D a person who is a follower and has no ideas of their own, carries little understanding, its flat (as 2D is).
Then a 3D person who is maybe a leader, the person with ideas and feelings and understanding and who is full and 3 dimensional.
But using these two dimensions I formed another dimension and that is 4D a dimension that forms a cube that is 3D but yet its still 2D, it can be looked at in both ways with a few movements.
2D on a piece of paper is flat but add a few lines in the right places and it can fool the eye into thinking its 3D.. this all sounds a bit complicated but there is a little thing you can gain from those words, of how you can think about things and how your eyes can be easily fooled.

Thank you for the rates everyone ;) :D

my friend and i are going through so much right now and can relate to some of this and i love this poem its one of best

You should check out my poem "Our Generation". It's much like this one. I liked it, mostly because I understand the meaning and completely agree.

:D i shall check out your poem and rate it :) thank you for the comment and its nice to know another agrees with what im trying to say...

I just wanted to say that I think this is an excellent poem.....the topic is a sad but very common one. You write from the heart and put it into words that give it all the more meaning. You're a great writer, hope to see more!

thank you :D and i shall write more

this is a very powerful poem to me...i loved it..thanx

i dont really
like it

this poem was really good u should stick to writing!!!!

nice poem..no wonder ur on the top...how'd u submit the poem into the contest? i think i'm gunna give it go. write back asap please n thanks

:)