thats i duna its good but it seems sorta like its twisted. i loved it mind, totally right for the dark section, its great. i hope u understood wat i sed, it wasnt ment to be a bad comment, far from it,
take care,
ellie

wow! really well done imagary! i havn't read a good poem like this in a long time!
keep on writing!.... 5/5

excellent poem i loved it a loved the metaphor you used it was brillant keep posting because that was just amazing. Thanks for your comment much appreciated

sorry i made a pigs ass of my comment hun.

Awesome!

WOW THATS GOOD

LOTTA LOVE MIKE