Make it longer!! It's really good and it flows perfectly! There just needs to be more! =D

Make it longer!! It's really good and it flows perfectly! There just needs to be more! =D

it flows well,i like your rhyming, especially in the first verse because it is very original. it seems to lack a personal touch, it just seems to be able to relate better.... very good job! i enjoyed it!
4/5
kt

excellent poem. well written. usually long lines dont rhyme well but you totally pulled it off! good job

yea i really like this one so i might expand it