not bad, again, the rhyming seems to brand it so it doesn't flow as well, sorry, i keep mentioning that, but the words and meaning of the poem is described very well, keep writing, you have some real talent! 4/5
kt

asesome poem, i love the rhymes in the first & third stanzas especially, very well written, 5/5!

*awesome, sorry about that

This is a good poem, I liked it but I think maybe it would have been better if it hadnt rhymed maybe thats just me but its still a good poem so keep up the writing. Also thanks for the comment on my poem

Thanks for posting on my discussion on the boards.

I have read this poem and you are a talented writer.

It made me think.

Nici