I love the last two lines, and how you portrayed the symbolism, I absolutly love how you brought that out and found such lovely fact in such a small thing.
But, even though I did like this, it didn't have your usual in depth symbolism and writing technique. Still lovely though, just not my favorite from you. It didn't show me the dramatic imagery or text you usually use. Nevertheless, good job

Don't read it tech-wise Pink, read it, and feeeel it. :-)

I really enjoyed this poem, its very created, and expresses alot of feeling, its very well written, and i personally really like it! but i was wondering if maybe you could comment and or vote on my new poem called "White Silk Dress" if its not too much trouble! Thanks, sarah jenkins!