this poem is great i like it how it is. one thing i hate the must is when people tell u what is wrong with the poem. but its ur poem u write it the way u feel it dont have to rhyme. not all poems rhyme. the best poems ever is the ones that u cant get. thats the ones that u will never forget. i am just sayin dont let people tell u that ur poems dont rhyme. u should put ur poems on this site i am on there to. creative poems.com

thats sweet of you to do for your friend, great poem keep writing!

~lil slam~

I like this one very warm and giving of yourself it was a good poem. Two Thumps up...

it poem was good, when I was reading this line upon line upon i wanted to read more, it was with anticipation
I really like the way you write.