I see you are new to the site. Welcome! lol I am proud to give you your first comment/vote. I like this poem a lot. You have definite potential.You have a spelling error, "flaus" is spelt "flaws". Another tip I have is to try to make the lines about the same amount of syllibles. I like the ending a lot. This is a great start to hopefully a future writer. Keep up the good work and I look foward to another poem by you. =]
-Cheerfully Cynical