me liked it. good luck with it. -Luke

I like the concept. But the lines just don't flow. I don't know it could just be my idiot self. Haha. Nice work on the concept though.

thank you for the comments and Erica i will take your advice into account its nice to get truthful feedback so i can improve on my poetic skill and know when I’m doing wrong.. thank you to all who commented :D And i know some did like this poem so i will also take you comment into account and continue writing this way :P

I sort of agree with erica, the lines didnt really flow together, but it was a powerful poem, it really touched me.