I would have to agree you are short and sweet but on the other hand learning to develope your thoughts into a more full picture could do you well too. Another thing in time you will learn I hope you can express yourself in more colorful words instead of being blunt. Writing is a craft and a honorable one think of your work as such take pride in it keep it up. Read Sunrise of Death or In-laws and tell me what you think

Another poem with true feelings. I think everyone can relate to this poem I think we have all been there one time in our life! Keep posting!