Comments : What are we living for?

  • 19 years ago

    by Ironic Allure

    Again, great poem. Very though provoking too.
    However, there is a little suggestion I have to make because It's bugging me, hehe.
    The stanza talking about your friends kind of, is a bit wishy washy towards the end, so as a slight change try
    'Are we for our friends?
    Who you always get to smile?
    Who pledge they'll care forever,
    But only last a while.'
    ..You don't have to use it. But let me know what you decide.
    Anyway, as always a great poem.
    Well done, Take care.
    -Laura.

  • 19 years ago

    by Kia

    cool poem... i really like it... makes you wonder what are we living for why are we hear great job