I agree with Ashley. It was a well written poem, but it didn't really tell a story, or anything like that.

The best line out of that entire piece was "She walked into my life
When the pieces were apart
She helped put them back together
And made an imprint in my heart". Honestly, I just thought it was... okay. Nothing special. It was just a tad emotional, but it lacked the essence of this sorrow that you say you're feeling. I read it, but I think, so what? You need to put in a lot more emotion. You also need to read your poetry before posting it up.. "shes" is not a word. It's "she's". I just don't think it's necessary to leave out the apostraphe. BUT, it was still okay. It wasn't horrible - though it just wasn't wonderful either.

another great peice of work... disapointing anyone is hard but when its ypur sister... ive been there... xox Sherrie