Beautiful imagery that brings the scene to life... I wish I could be there, frankly.

thank you very much for your comments,good clean advice,is what im after and at last i found some1 to be honest etc,point out the little things that could improve my stuff,thank you every so much.by the way your stuff is not my kind of thing really,but i did love this one. iloved the last verse.

Evening shimmers on a still branch
Quenching the bustle by a golden stream
Earthly fingers sway in the breeze
That soothes to a natural dream
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so good.