"The first time we did.................
And I really cried"

I think something like "the first time we tried..." might help the flow a little and there's a spelling error (wekk instead of week) but apart from those two minor things the sentiment shines through nicely.

I'll be sure to read and comment more soon.

Bert

agh got ya:) your proably right but..lol i dont know i was on the p hone when i wrote it haha! but thanx i appricate it you commentin on it:)