REALLY good

this is a great poem..keep it up

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Kevin.

thanks :)

Ahh i loved this ending! so much more confidence and conviction it seems is in this one.. i'll only comment on the different ending so... i loved the queen stanza.. great flow that practically read itself..

So the question is should I
hold it all within,
every heartache, tear secret, sin?

this breaks the flow,.. also.. it looks like you're tryin to say each word from the previous stanza.. like ur questioning if you should continue being the queen of all that,.. i liked the idea a lot,.. but this lacks structure and if you scrapped those lines and rewrote that second stanza with the same idea in mind, i think it'd strengthen this..

And I'll tell you now
the answers no
God did not put me here
to be sent "below"

the second line of this.. i dont see why u used answer's instead of answer is.. the latter fits the syllable count more evenly and in return helps the flow.. i liked this idea, cuz its really the better decision.. not being the queen of so much burden can be a relief.. lol not that i know cuz im sure as hell not a queen nor have io ever been.. lol anyway.. good job on this.. the Queen idea/stanza kinda breaks it up because the rhyme scheme and number of lines changes, but i think if u like it then it should stay.. plus its a good stanza as is. pZ out n keep writing.. im lookin forward to more

Loved It!