Wow, this is such a tragic tale! You wrote it brilliantly! I loved the attention to detail...keep it up~Holly

Nice. It is brilliant. The length didn't matter what you wrote did.

I thought that this was really good! I enjoyed reading it! Check out some of mine if you get time..
shalise

wow, you said you were disappointed with this, I don't know why
I love how you told this story, especially from the point of view of a deceased watching her own death take placed along with the confusion she has witnessed through the justification through her death which she has yet to have portrayed itself. and the way you discribe the cruelty and rage set off by the man was intesifying and extremely well put. I especially admired the line,
"You took what little faith I had in trust and threw it at the sky"
I love how you wrote that. Beautiful job