i love it and i no how u feel good job and keep it up and hang in there!! look at my stuff if u have time....

~ShAtTeReD*HeArT~
o yea 5/5

This is a really good poem with a lot of depth and meaning, good job!

The last line was great - not sure if the exclamation was neede dbut thats my pickiness
Keep writing - this is a great poem =]

5/5 I like how it flows in lines 9-12

Hun,

Well done for your debu poem. its insightful in not only getting to know you, but to your writing style and where you're coming from. I see hope in your writing eyes, and I see a broken girl in need of a pen. this truly is wonderful, and I'm thankful to you for sharing. Short sweet and to the ponit with a few metaphors and well placed words along the way =) keep it up

Jenn