very good I love it keep it up

luv it. keep it up.

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nida

Very good, you have a lot of potential to write some more great poems well done :D xxx

decent poem, you need to put more structure into your poems. I think that you lack that in a big way. You have a problem with it, they are just one continues sentence because there is nothing that devides them. But the feeling and the thought and effort were definately all there. Good job on your poem, work abit on your structure and you will bloom into a wonderful poet.

really good poem.loved it 5/5.keep it up

I personally really liked this poem, though I agree with Dark Savior that maybe it needs structure. But over all, I think it's really good and i'll give you 5/5 cuz it obviously took some time writing and came from the heart.
SatuzKa

i have read your profile and i must say that your poem really contrasts to what your 'file says! That doesn't mean I didnt like it, however. It just proves how human you are - we all have ups and downs and i'm glad you blame fate andnot yourself for this particular down. lots of love misty

This is by far my favorite!