"Hindsight that leads to stoical days"
you could use the more common adj "stoic" instead of "stoical," but both work.

"You can never have me
If my soul does die."
I feel like you could have made the last line end more like "if my soul dies." I think the does is there as a away to aid the rhythm, but it doesn't really need to be there.

I especially liked the second to last stanza, but I agree with bob that in this case, you could afford to lose at least a few, if not all, of the punctuation marks (esp. some commas).

The punctuation adds the adequate pause I want, it is a slow read, and spacing alone does not create the timing I want.

And the awkward phrasing gives it a unique feel, I want people to have to think about what I am saying, not just accept it as everyday language.

Thank you though :)

Magnifique! Wonderful jaunt through an eloquent, enlightened plead to an unconscionable denial in ignorance.