Best or not, it's powerful, visual, and visceral. Wonderful piece!

You're right it is very unusual, but I do love how detailed your writing is in descriptive terms, I enjoyed reading it immenselu. Do keep it up!

-Tessa

I LOVED this
True, I could tell throughout the piece before you stated that it was most likely an experiment, because it seemed to have difficulty with the flow and some of the words seemed forced.
However,
your graphic imagery was brilliant. I cannot praise enough how terrifying and dramatic the picture was painted, and the thorough detail of which you displayed.
Your symbols were also incredible. Comparing the whole piece of the man to an illustration, stripping it down with the graphic detail and horrific symbols you provided was completely original and skillfully done.
some lines I admired,
"This picture drawn subtly with Grey led
A mask with chiseled features charismatically formed
The mouth is a wicked smile of corrupt spirits
A torso built by the hands of a shallow soul
Whilst his feet sit humbly in line with the white page
Strange; I can’t see the heart made of pure black coal."
(note: I didn't really like the last line in that stance though. I think it was too simply stated, it could be re-written more poetically.)

Overall, Excellent job.