Constructive: Think you should have organized this better by breaking them up into different paragraphs.

Otherwise, I don't know what to say. I don't know how else you can improve. The words are so deep and well amazing.

I agree, this poem does more than scratch at the surface, brilliant wording, the structure is awesome, very impressed!

Peace. [Sole]

Again great job...most of my poems rhyme, so im going to try and write one that doesnt, its kinda hard though when ive been writing rhyming poetry. Great job!!

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~Always4You~

Hey Great poem! Beautifully worded, and VERY deep emotion!
Well DOne!
Love MEl

Well done! I really love the emotions in your poem. What makes a great writer is someone who writes from the heart, and I think you do a very good job at that! I like this poem!
5/5

Another great poem! :]
Your wording stood out to me the most in this one - purely wonderful. The flow was flawless & the structure was nice. Well done! You're a very talented writer, keep it up! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Wow I am speechless, the imagery was out standing, and the word choice again was absoulty amazing, I really liked this So far it has to be my favorite by you, well written, excellent flow, nicely penned, as always you never cease to amaze me, keep up the excellent work 5/5

I prefer poems that rhyme, but this one, i liked. Because it was different, and the way the stanza's were different lengths, was a cool way of writing.
I think you did a good job on this one
xxx