Comments : As I Shake...

  • 19 years ago

    by confusion

    i dont wanna leave ya hun, i wish i could help you :( keep holding on for me. another excellent poem btw, just so sad. luv lucy lu -x-x-x-

  • 19 years ago

    by Toni

    Oh girl,this was fantastic, absolutely stunning!!! This is one of your best in my opinion, the imagery was brilliant, there were no forced rhymes..and it was so obviously written straight from the heart. The beginning was especially good:

    Leave me with my thoughts,
    Just leave me here to break,
    Forget and let me disappear,
    Fading as i shake,

    That has to be one of the most perfect stanzas anyone has ever written!! I'm blown away!!

    Here for you if you EVER need me, just email and i'll be there

    xxxxxxx