I liked this poem a lot... I cannot think of any constuctive criticism... as I think it flowed well and worked well as a poem.... good work ur on my favs

wow excellent poem! keep it up alough what is sin 7 (im not very religious, is it one of the commandments?)
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..i enjoyed reading it ...have to agree u have got talent there...keep up the good work!

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