You're are always there
*Should this be YOU*

But I did anyways
I've pissed you off but still you're there
*Should anyways be ANYWAY and I think the profanity takes away from your piece try using PEEVED or something else similar*

Besides that hun its a great piece that I found touching personally and a pleasure to read keep up the great work sweety hope you can work with my feedback

Eirisa