Comments : The Outsider

  • 19 years ago

    by Rolo

    Nicely written, it has a good flow to it. 5.

    ~rolo

  • 19 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Hayley: This piece is truly wonderful even though it covers such a sad topic.

    Babe I know that you have experienced so much pain in your life and you have done a great job reflecting your pains in your writings.

    As I have always said you continue to show great talent. I only pray that you continue with the gift that God gave you and use it to help others that have suffered as well..

    Good Job!

    --Sher

  • 19 years ago

    by hussain

    i hope u arnt doing what you imply as this would be a great waste of such beautiful talent. You are young and i can understand how hard life maybe for you..but if you keep going and get through this you will be rewarded and be a stronger person. lifes precious and so are you. So look ahead and not behind you have a future you just have to believe in it.

    take care !

  • 19 years ago

    by Carmen

    the rhyming was good, but it didn't flow to great. it seemed as though some of them were forced. this sentance- but what ever you do don't forget I'm sorry,- kinda confused me. i think you should change it. well, i gave it a 4/5, it was good, but could be improved

  • 19 years ago

    by Emilia

    sooo good! 5/5 for this one.. keep it up.. hugs

  • 19 years ago

    by ~:.GodeSsOfTemPtati0n.:~

    sad but well written...a moving piece... liked it... i can relate...

    5/5 hope u pass by mine... votes and comments much appreciated...
    much love
    ***letishia***

  • 19 years ago

    by Solace

    Life will get better.. It just takes time.. I can relate to this poem alot it hit home... Keep writing and keep your head up.. take care (always)) xx:

    *> : PainOfOne