great write hun...it's not bad at all...and it's still brilliant, even if it was unintended...I hope you're alright..I love you xxxx <33

-Mortalidaga
xxTakeCarexx

yeah great poem!!! i like it was gggrrreat ha dont ask.. neways even if it wasnt wat u intended to make it was still awesome.. some of the best art (poetry is art right?) are mistakes. neways great poem keep up the great work..
*-*Kat*-*

no it's not bad it's great !! amazing poem !!! anyway, yea...I have nothing to say...I love you !!!!
E.

It isn't bad. Sure it's a little weird but who cares? It's fine.

I think this poem ended too early. Not to be rude or anything. If you added one more verse I think you would get a better ending. It's just like you havent finnished what you started. Anyway, its still very good:)

Good poem! You really said alot with so few words! Keep to it~Holly