brilliant poem! cant fault it

the ending is a little too weak for the rest of the poem....but everything else is amazing! I love how you worded this poem. This is an amazing piece!

hey ya yours are pretty good.. i dont think i write good poems but i still do. i think that you have a tallent and ya....

Great poem, keep it up

-no more

I can really relate to these lines:

Why do I do this to myself?
Oh I know,
because I've seen you with her.
You flirt and dance,
and generally romance.

It's a great poem. Keep writing.

XoXo. G.a.B.y.

I know how you feel for sure

My stomach starts to roll,
I stand up, the room spins

that was my favorite part of this poem

but even though this didnt have a set rhyme scheme i think the rhyming did exsist and im usually not a fan of messy rhymes but it just seemed to work well here and everything flowed great 5/5

I know how you feel for sure

My stomach starts to roll,
I stand up, the room spins

that was my favorite part of this poem

but even though this didnt have a set rhyme scheme i think the rhyming did exsist and im usually not a fan of messy rhymes but it just seemed to work well here and everything flowed great 5/5