Thats very good David.And when he gets back i'm going to tell him what you said.

I'm back on my old account so wahey i'm here so i'm just off to delete my other new account!

The war had brought many to there knees,
Saving few who bargained with god saying please,
They ran for there lives as the shooting began,

the word 'there' should be replaced with the word 'their'

also

Many have died and many more will to,

to should be 'too'

apart from that it was a really good poem, set the atmostphere of the war zone, though could have added more adjectves to really give that flavor.