wow really sweet peom with a strong message.the only thing is i think the last two lines of the third staza struggle to follow on...hope u dont minnd me saying so luv! i espec like the first stanza as u related tito a storm! really good.
hope ur okay...take care
xxxLoUxxx

thats awesome, i thought it was great, i picked out a stanza to put that i really liked cause of the wonderful imagery and as i was going through its like oo i wana put that too and that...
"please, let her be happy again
as she makes me when I'm down
take the worries, scatter them as ashes
then tred them deep into the ground"
i loved the imagery in that, it was brill i thought.
if she reads it she will love it,
all ma luv, still here if ya need me, though u probly dont now wit... o ne mind
ellie
xx

Oh this was brilliant hun!! Especially this bit:

As the storm clouds begin to gather
and the thunder starts to strike
my guardian angel manages to rescue me
guiding me a path towards the light

That was the best bit i think, such flawless imagery, you really are so talented, never forget that ok! Here for you still xxxx