very nice said

Im not very clear about exactly what the point was here.. but even so.. not one of you best.

Interesting poem, Great ending

Very powerfull man , and scary a bit at first ,!!!
what a strong emotions!!

mmm, but if i goign to give a little criic , i hope ythis poem have a rhym of some sort , i dont intend to say it is not good , but paragraphing and ryning would make a perfect one
:)
anyway this si my opignion!!

Very well written...and nicely expressed...
I like the last part most...very beautiful..

"Where the ground breaks and the earth collapses?,
There I am falling from you,"

"To tell the truth,
I'd wish not say,
But to honesty betray would be manipulating,"

^^ beautifully written...