Comments : The Disease

  • 16 years ago

    by Hina

    "Cruel love why do leave me estranged
    ' Did you mean cruel love why do " you?" hope so...excellent word usage and splendid job!
    ~Hina

    Ps. Rach, this is surely another of your many masterpieces...Good luck on your new book..will be on the look out :)

  • 16 years ago

    by themeuneverseen

    Another great poem hun! I love all of your work and I think I'm gonna add u to my favorites list now! Keep up the great work hun!
    love alwayz......
    Haily
    XOXOXOXOX

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    The flow was off,l I mean you start out well the first part of the sentance and jump to another whole style it was hard to read through I don't want to be too critical but it just your so close and then boom it falls apart.like this
    THE SMILE THAT YOU CAN LIGHT UP MY FACE (SHOULD BE) THE SMILE THAT YOU HAVE COULD LIGHT UP MY FACE. Mistakes like this could be dealt with in revision trust me my work needs alot too. But do revision first before putting it on your work is alot more cleaner. I got over 200 Poems I need to revise but I hate details so I will probibly have some one else do it. Writing takes time and commitment so don't fret that much just read it over before you post. Take care and talk to you soon.....

  • 16 years ago

    by Emilia

    great! very nice.. 5 stars.. hugs

  • 16 years ago

    by shannon

    yet anohter great poem..5/5..you have a talent

    shannon

  • 16 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    I would really love to read your book. I know it will be great just like your poetry! I love all your poems once again another great poem! 5/5 Take Care Brooke~