One, two, three AWWW... that's all I have to say. It's sweet yet has the melancholy feel of death... definetely a sorrowful tale of lost love, and eternal love.
VERY WELL DONE!

simple amazing write good job. 5/5

this was ok but what were you really waiting foir her death you kinda went from school to growing old in a matter of a few lines and you seemed to skip alot of things. It just did not work for me sorry...

this was ok but what were you really waiting foir her death you kinda went from school to growing old in a matter of a few lines and you seemed to skip alot of things. It just did not work for me sorry...

aww... :*(... aww.... thats so cute.. don't stop writing you wil go far..
love ya!
marlene

Aww thats so cute.. i love it
5/5

take care
thanks for sharing
shannon

I agree that it seemed rushed. You have some beautiful word choices but you just need to slow it down even it makes the poem longer. The words should be addicting enough to keep their attention.