Comments : Remains the Same

  • 18 years ago

    by pinkalias

    I love that you display how all hope is lost in this aspect.
    The reader feels the utter sense of helplessness when witnessing the piece, for no matter how much pain is concieved by these actions (as is stated) "things will always be the same".
    I loved these lines,
    "I could beg on all fours
    Scrape up my dulled knees"
    Shows the pleading to an exceed and the desperate attempt for mercy.

    I absolutly loved this stance,
    "I could bleed you an ocean
    A river of salty tears
    With colors of darkness
    Displaying untainted fears"
    Beautiful.

  • 18 years ago

    by sHaTtErEdMiStAkE

    This poem is really deep. I love your writing so much. Great job! 5/5. Alos if you ever get any time please read and comment on my poems. I'd really like that. Thx. Keep up the great work.

    Madison