Comments : The Queen Scheme

  • 18 years ago

    by Liz

    brilliant, keep up the great work! x x x

  • 18 years ago

    by Gem

    Wow, thats really good. 5/5! I love the comparisons!! Keep writing! Lotsa luv, Gem xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Marjan

    hei Nobody-©, That was excellent.
    Very good choice of words. Keep it up.
    Wish you everlasting happiness,
    Marjan

  • 18 years ago

    by cant sleep

    i love your words!! i cant believe i havent commented on this one. i miss you! where have you been?! write back! i have some new poems. i want you to critisize...i mean..look at. :D lol. well..yeah!
    AMOR SIEMPRE!!
    Nancy

  • 18 years ago

    by Broke&Lost

    Great Poem. I really liked it. I loved the rhyme scheme to it and you are right...somethings may seem hard to give up or you might somehow lose without them but taking a leap of faith could get you the victory too.
    Keep up the good poems.
    Jenn.

  • 18 years ago

    by Shelby Bridges


    Having played a few chess games in my time ,,,,I really enjoyed this and a good move....Excellent write and good english.......

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Very interesting. You read this and think of a game of chess, come to find the great moral you meant at the bottom. I love the morals at the bottom of your poem... Nicely done, as always. You're a very strong poet.

    xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Daenerys Stormborn

    Great poem. I don't think I am wrong when I say it's truly original! But I think you may have meant "worthy" instead of worth. I could be wrong. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    I wonder about changing "he would" to "would he"... you inverted the syntax in the prededing stanza's last line, as well.. other than that .. that's a very poignant piece. solid all around besides what i stated earlier.

  • 17 years ago

    by Heidi Harover

    I loved that poem, good work.