Comments : Daddy When.... [re-submitted]

  • 18 years ago

    by No Motiv?

    Well...the caps for every beginning letter of the word really threw me off....in fact, it made reading hard. The message is clear, yet still vague - it's hard to connect with the simplicity.

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    i like this poem you expressed a lot of emotion and thats what i like in a poem...

  • 18 years ago

    by EoB

    This one also lacks a complete rhyming scheme, which destorys the flow...

    Most of the stanzas have rhymes, but some doesn't...Either that signifies that you were unable express what you wanted to with rhymes, or that you are very progressive...

    As for the poem, it is filled with emotions, which is very important...

    The message is once again easy to find, and you present it in a nice way...

    good one

  • 18 years ago

    by katie!

    good, emotioanl poem, well done and keep writing

  • 18 years ago

    by Amanda

    I do like it - my honest opinion. I think it was written with alot of thought and it is beautifully written. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by DANI

    hey hayley guess who this is WCMD!!! i like your poem thought id let ya know c u in skool!!! x.x.x.x.x

  • 18 years ago

    by Marjan

    I love your poems. all your poems rock. I love the way you write them.
    love you so much,
    marjan