This poem was wonderfull, it had a great flow along with powerfull words, there is a deep meaning in this poem that one has to think about, then they will understand, there is no doubt in my mind that you put a large ammount of effort into this, it is Breathtaking, and one of the best on this site, a great read.

Excellent! Really good flow and all!

Great poem....it painted a picture in my mind.... and i like your choice of words...

the flow was good and the rhyming was on point throughout it all.

nice job.5/5

Wow, this poem is amazing, it is excellently written, totally breathtaking. I like it from the beginning to the end, but my favorite stanza is:
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I’ll sense his glow then drift along past,
Picking up courage for the next guilty glance,
Look into his eyes then away again fast,
My heart in its cage, my head in a trance.-

The flow is great, and the choice of words in it is superb.
Truly amazing one, 5/5 from me.
Keep up!

The emotion was great. I loved the wording including the rhyming. The flow was good. None of it seemed forced. This was a very deep poem. I gave it a 5/5. I saw nothing wrong with anything in this poem.

In the first line; I believe that TARE should be TEAR. The second line is confusing; the CHEST-FLAMES throws me off. Maybe try rewording it: FIRE HELD IN MY CHEST WHILE FLAMES BURN HIS WRIST. Using MY and HIS in the same sentence makes readers think you are talking about two separate people (unless you were talking about two people).

“A throbbing poisonous echo in my hollow soul”; I think there are too many adjectives here; it overloads the readers concentration on the line.

Other than a few spots I mentioned, I thought it was well written.

Good job.