Did i insult you?cos i didn't mean to.truly.i simply meant that putting it in one paragraph makes is look much longer than it is.but it seems like you're not too happy about that so i'll stop XD

anw, this poem's pretty sad.i wonder why everyone who writes love poems is about breakups or rejection.makes love sound like a mistake.but its nice.it was written such that it was quite straight-forward, yet seemed like there was some hidden meanings

p.s:i'm 14 now, but in 2 months i'll be 15, a mere 1 year away from you, ate only one year's worth of rice lesser than you.lol

Very compelling stuff you write.

Wow now i know what you mean about beefing the words. really great, gets a person real deep. keep writin ur good

Wow nice poem..nice style..nice poetic meter! AMAZZZZZING kepe writn hunn. good luck. XXLISSA

This one is very good :)