Well written, a bit sorrowful for a game i'd think, but it got the job done.

Good illustration...though harsh in content. Hopefully it is only a story and not reality for there is no poetic justice in the end. Keep up the excellent work A.B.

Hey Amanda,
As it was a poem game, This pome is excellent, your use of the words ( crackle , yellow adn slide) was in its right spot.

I was Touched by this part
"All that matters is tomorrow, when he'll promise never to hurt her again"

much Respect,
Rua Francis.

It was such a brilliant poem..
It totally sadens me to hear of things like this happeing to women..
a very good poem!
5/5
xox Bam