It was GOOD,
it didnt blow me away,
but it was good.

the flow was not as good as it could have been, and there was this one bit where you forced a rhyme and it didnt make sense:
"my head always rejected"
umm yeah.

But you have a lot of potential, dont take my comments too personally im just trying to be honest. I wonder, what inspired you to write this? is it true?

is this true? cause it's really good and i couldn't come up with something like that if it wasn't true. anyways if it is i'm sooooo sorry that you have to go through that. 5/5 and it did blow mw away!