This poem is beautifully dark and well written.
I enjoyed reading this piece.
May you find comfort within your writing and your soul.
Remember:
"The true art of writing befalls in the heart and not the mind, if it does not then tis not an art of writing." ~By Deaths Maiden (Copyright)

Wow, now this one was good. It flowed much better and the wording was good too! For this one, I don't have critique. It was thoroughly written. Keep writing,
Dorotea

just loved it. excellent poem. keep it up. love, Marjan

Wow - that has a good impact on the reader....

I love the way it's written.

-Lyd

That was really beautiful

nice job, very sad yet calming.

This is another of my very favorites from you. In the first line, i'd drop the "can", seems more smooth. Here "Of dancing bears and painted wings" This fits very well, but i'd love it to be something personal to you, rather than from a song. "All the sadness of our death
Rains the world that we left" something like "Rains upon the world we left" sounds better to me, but i'm stupid, so yeah... Moving on... "And held them close" this seems out of place, but I really don't have a suggestion of how to modify it, maybe you can think of something. I love the ending, it's perfect, to me. So anyway, maybe I helped, mostly I wasted your time....but all in all, very well done. -forever your Dark Elf

I liked this one and the title is good too. keep it up.
marjan

This was okay. I can't stress enough that constant or almost constant or none at all rhyme scheme are soo important. And the rhyme scheme of this poem was vary sporadic and hard to follow. Work on maintaining constant rhyme scheme. I really liked the first three lines "The tender cry I hear
Is music to my ear
I know you live for the sound" and based on that I know that you could write amazing poetry if there were a more constant rhyme scheme. Keep writing!

this will be the shortest comment i'll ever leave, but there's only one word that completely sums up this poem: beautiful!

that was a great poem with an interesting rhyme scheme! the only line i would change is "But I didn't see life's scheme"... i'm not sure how it fits into the poem, but maybe it just needs a little explanation for me! but it is a 5!

Ah.. I like this one, so much truths behind the lines. The flow is there in this poem, good job. =)

'dispair' --> 'despair'

Very dark and sad. Good stuff! =D

Most of the stanzas like the first one were a little messed up but all in all
great poem

love always
tabby