great job for your first poem kepp writing bcoz with time you will get better and better
if you want you and read and comment on some of mine and see what you think it may just help you learn more to write about

andrea

This poem is great, keep up the good work. amie xx

Aww i would care if u were gone...hell i would anyway awesome poem...u really r very good at poetry u should keep going. luv ~*naomi*~

Damn thats good.

That was great 5/5
Keep writing

I loved the beginning and the flow was just wonderful.
take care,
marjan

I would miss you, i would miss you! don't make that mistake..please