i have to say that the first one was better..but its good to hear the difference in view..After a while i got so sick of being sick and there was nothing i could do to stop. Good job. and good luck.

This is a really deep poem. It seemed as if you put all your emotion into it. I think it's awesome. Keep it up.

RachelMorgan

That is so sad yet so good! Hate the topic but live the poem. 5/5

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