I got a bit confused in this - it started out really well... I was thinking you were talking about a loved one that you were feeling confused about - you were upset because you couldn't show him how you felt towards him or say the words. But then it switched so quickly at the end to you talking about a friend who you saved "that night"... I just wasn't sure who the poem was about in the end (a guy you love or a best friend you saved?) as the story about the guy wasn't resolved in the end and the story about the best friend wasn't explained (you just told that you'd saved her and not what was going on)...

It was a good write in that I could feel more emotion in this one. (talking about how your salty tears caused scars down your face and things)... but it feels more like there are two poems in one here and neither idea (boy vs best friend) was fully explored.

Does that make sense?

Mo